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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: October 29, 2023, 10:56:24 pm »
can should be could
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Bugs / Fence fishing
« on: October 29, 2023, 10:52:34 pm »
You can set up a fishing rod through this fence
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Suggestions / Re: Blacksmith Refurbishment (melee reforging/tinkerer)
« on: October 29, 2023, 10:41:02 pm »
Needs to be a random event that only spawns if you're using a gypsy charm.
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: September 21, 2023, 02:21:23 pm »
wrong tense, have should be had
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 25, 2023, 02:01:23 pm »
'discharge' should say 'discharges'
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 25, 2023, 02:00:01 pm »
the last word 'though' is redundant
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 06:09:33 pm »
talking to Marcos after killing the beast
missing 'can' between 'as you' and 'probably tell'
missing 'can' between 'as you' and 'probably tell'
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 03:18:03 pm »
1st pic:
- Remove 'of' before 'meaningless'
2nd pic:
- change 'ran' to 'run'
- change ' to make' to 'of making'
- Remove 'of' before 'meaningless'
2nd pic:
- change 'ran' to 'run'
- change ' to make' to 'of making'
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 02:54:53 pm »
1st pic:
- More Phreak speak, a more understandable line would be "Do I look like I need medical assistance?"
- Option 3 "could've stumbled onto the ground" is unnecessarily long phrasing, "could've taken a tumble" or "could've fallen over" or just "could've collapsed" would all be better
2nd pic:
- Remove the 'a' before 'deep thought'
- 'non existent' should be 'nonexistent'
3rd pic:
- 'tangled with' should be 'tangled up in' or 'dealing with' unless the goal is to have Phreak be as incomprehensible as possible
- Option 2 is also incomprehensible
- More Phreak speak, a more understandable line would be "Do I look like I need medical assistance?"
- Option 3 "could've stumbled onto the ground" is unnecessarily long phrasing, "could've taken a tumble" or "could've fallen over" or just "could've collapsed" would all be better
2nd pic:
- Remove the 'a' before 'deep thought'
- 'non existent' should be 'nonexistent'
3rd pic:
- 'tangled with' should be 'tangled up in' or 'dealing with' unless the goal is to have Phreak be as incomprehensible as possible
- Option 2 is also incomprehensible
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 02:28:40 pm »
1st Pic:
- 'Out of a sudden' should be 'All of a sudden' or 'Out of nowhere'
- "Y'all" might just be Phreak speak but for anyone who has heard the slang in real life "Is Yapping y'all" do these days?" sounds completely wrong, I would change it to "Is yapping all you people do these days?"
- Option 1 sounds more like sarcastic dismissal than genuine shock, I suggest replacing the period with an exclamation point
- Option 2 'tags along' is odd terminology, I have only ever heard it used in reference to travelling somewhere together, 'reciprocates' or 'joins in' would make more sense here
2nd pic:
- Add 'here' after 'burst in'
- Add a comma after 'interrogate me'
- I have no idea what the second half of this sentence is supposed to convey and I'm not sure if that's intentional or not
3rd pic:
- This could also use a rewrite, though I'm not sure what it's trying to say
- 'Out of a sudden' should be 'All of a sudden' or 'Out of nowhere'
- "Y'all" might just be Phreak speak but for anyone who has heard the slang in real life "Is Yapping y'all" do these days?" sounds completely wrong, I would change it to "Is yapping all you people do these days?"
- Option 1 sounds more like sarcastic dismissal than genuine shock, I suggest replacing the period with an exclamation point
- Option 2 'tags along' is odd terminology, I have only ever heard it used in reference to travelling somewhere together, 'reciprocates' or 'joins in' would make more sense here
2nd pic:
- Add 'here' after 'burst in'
- Add a comma after 'interrogate me'
- I have no idea what the second half of this sentence is supposed to convey and I'm not sure if that's intentional or not
3rd pic:
- This could also use a rewrite, though I'm not sure what it's trying to say
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 02:10:44 pm »
1st pic:
- The last option should say 'the face of another' instead of 'a face of another'
2nd pic:
- It is strange to use 'rotates around' for living things, it would be better as 'turns'
- "subsistence here for the likes of you, one could only dream of." Considering the usage of caveat in the next line I think he's suggesting there are valuables here and warning the player to back off. If this is just Phreak's way of talking then 'subsistence' should at least start with a capital S, otherwise I would change the line to something more easily understood like "This place is the scavenging opportunity of your dreams."
- Option 4 has a typo 'attraced' should be 'attracted'
- Option 5 should say "you've" instead of 'you'
3rd pic:
- Option 1 should say 'either' instead of 'neither'
- The last option should say 'the face of another' instead of 'a face of another'
2nd pic:
- It is strange to use 'rotates around' for living things, it would be better as 'turns'
- "subsistence here for the likes of you, one could only dream of." Considering the usage of caveat in the next line I think he's suggesting there are valuables here and warning the player to back off. If this is just Phreak's way of talking then 'subsistence' should at least start with a capital S, otherwise I would change the line to something more easily understood like "This place is the scavenging opportunity of your dreams."
- Option 4 has a typo 'attraced' should be 'attracted'
- Option 5 should say "you've" instead of 'you'
3rd pic:
- Option 1 should say 'either' instead of 'neither'
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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors
« on: July 22, 2023, 01:50:50 pm »
1st pic:
- Add 'The' before 'nauseating'
- Remove 'a' before 'literal sewage'
- 'a livable area' may be better as 'a living space'
2nd pic:
- Remove the comma between 'decrepit mugger look' and 'is his clenched right fist'
3rd pic:
- 'disinsection' is a typo, should be 'disinfection'
- The persuasion check has the player speak in 3rd person - should say "It's in neither of our interests" rather than "It's in neither's interest"
- The intimidation check is technically correct but the wording makes it seem like someone making fun of archaic English literature
- Add 'The' before 'nauseating'
- Remove 'a' before 'literal sewage'
- 'a livable area' may be better as 'a living space'
2nd pic:
- Remove the comma between 'decrepit mugger look' and 'is his clenched right fist'
3rd pic:
- 'disinsection' is a typo, should be 'disinfection'
- The persuasion check has the player speak in 3rd person - should say "It's in neither of our interests" rather than "It's in neither's interest"
- The intimidation check is technically correct but the wording makes it seem like someone making fun of archaic English literature
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Suggestions / Re: Additional Ferryman Dialog
« on: November 05, 2022, 12:38:21 pm »
I just took the shard to him as well and was surprised to see there's no dialog for it. On a more serious note, a few comments about it from him would be appreciated.
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Bugs / 2 bugged tiles at JSHQ entrance
« on: November 05, 2022, 12:17:22 pm »
They appear as land but act as water