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General / Re: [Endgame Spoilers] Events at Rail Crossing and how they affect the endgame

« on: January 05, 2016, 06:08:13 am »

So, disabling the walkers/robots at crossing makes you unable to ally with the faceless  -  true or false?

False. The gist of it is as MichaelBurge said. Buzzer's death is also avoidable.

Epeli, you have a very thorough knowledge of the game, can you tell me why I am not able to ally with the Faceless when according to MichaelBurge's investigations I should be able to? Here's an entire history of my interactions with them:

--disabled the plasma sentries, snuck into Buzzer's shop, let them read my mind, convinced them to leave and spare Buzzer
--helped them in Foundry by honestly telling them everything I knew, they left peacefully and thanked me
--saved the guy in Core City, gave him a high quality health hypo
--dude showed up at the Institute to warn me to leave, I attempted to do so but the game doesn't continue unless you go and squeal to Eidein, sigh
--sat there twiddling my thumbs and doing nothing at all while the Faceless and Tchortists fought each other, then bravely ran away on the elevator

In essence I did every single thing possible to help them and nothing to harm them, ever, yet they still tell me I am "not an ally." Unless disabling the plasma sentries or using Persuasion to save Buzzer have some negative effect, there is no way they should be neutral to me. I just can't figure it out, and it's frustrating as hell.

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General / Re: Crowd control for non psion/crossbow users?

« on: January 05, 2016, 06:00:17 am »

There are craftable 5mm shock bullets, but I'm not sure if they actually stun or just add electro damage. 8.6mm incendiary rounds can set enemies on fire, but good luck finding the blueprint for them; I never did.

Also, don't forget about chemical pistols. They have great CC potential.

48

Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors

« on: January 04, 2016, 07:59:46 pm »

Special Protectorate war crimes edition!

~~contains potential spoilers~~



Mushroom Brew text: "You have no idea what's this made of" --> "You have no idea [what this is] made of"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694286




Moe: "I don't even know why did she choose that location" --> "why [she chose] that location"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780723




Jyles: "they are the only one's we've got" --> "ones" no apostrophe
"they are best buy." --> "they are [the] best buy."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780765




Rail Crossing bartender: "Haven't had much visitors since the Faceless showed" --> "Haven't had [many] visitors" or "Haven't had much [in the way of] visitors"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694762




Mitchell in Core City: "Or was it ,Manjula?" has the space before the comma instead of after it--but frankly, that comma isn't needed anyway.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694359




Col. Cathcart: "Well, Corporal, is was told this Southgater could prove to be an excelent ally" --> "[I} was told" "excellent" (needs two Ls)

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694376


"So I dediced to send an expedition to locate the facility and see if they can dig out something" --> "decided" (D and C switched) "see if they [could] dig out something"
"Tthe time is up" --> "The" (one T)

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694412


"We lost Epione Lab to Free Drones." --> "to [the] Free Drones."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780825


"numerous important informations" --> the word "information"doesn't work this way; use "numerous important [pieces of] information" or "[much] important information"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780882


"His informations were always incredibly accurate" --> "His [information was] always incredibly accurate"
"He warned us about their operations so that we could have acted in time, or generally leaking information regarding important figures" --> "He warned us... so that we [could act] in time, [and] generally [leaked] information..."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781082


"Free Drones are a kind of people who..." --> "are [the] kind of people"
"learned of a teenage girl who was suspected of being contacted by one of the Free Drones." --> "a teenage girl who [we suspected had been contacted] by one of the Free Drones."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781117




Fraser: "when you're dealing with people who aren't on the same level as you are." --> "the same level as you." no "are" needed

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694477


"But, you now this very well" --> "know"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694492


"and marvelous man he was." --> "and [a] marvelous man he was"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781371




Anastasia: "I think we both earned a lot about each... other's professions" --> "we both [learned] a lot"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781392


"A frown chisels itself into her forehead." --> Frowns do not go on the forehead.    Try "A [sharp furrow] chisels itself into her forehead" or something like that.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781407




Renegade: "I was sent to Fort Apogee to negotiate" --> "I was sent [from] Fort Apogee"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694568




Holloway: "It didn't take too long for you to finally meet the sergeant" --> needs to be "doesn't" to be consistent with other present-tense NPC descriptions

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694587


"It's not one specific thing... It's a perpetuating problem I have had with the Protectorate" I think the word you're looking for here is "ongoing," not "perpetuating."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694609


"that's not what I signed for, damn it!" --> "not what I signed [up] for" or "signed [on] for"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694631


"I realized it probably wouldn't do a damn even if I did" --> "it wouldn't do a damn [thing] even if I did"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694650


"That is everything there is to it" --> "That is [all] there is to it"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694665




Brady: Missing space between "from a grave." and "They silently stand there"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780626




Consul Oliver: "it is essential that the two to understand each other well." the "to" is not needed

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780783


"I don't see why corporal shouldn't be present" --> "why [the] corporal"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780805


"it collapsed, killing everything in it." --> "killing [everyone] in it."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780859


"Consul Oliver for you, Captain!" --> "[That's] Consul Oliver [to] you, Captain!"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780948


"You find Consul infuriated" --> "You find [the] Consul infuriated"
"What surprises me the most is that Colonel did nothing to prevent it!" --> "that [the] Colonel"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781138




Mareth: "Their sinister masks reveal nothing to the eye, only to imagination." --> "only to [the] imagination"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780900


"the silence is broken by whom you presume is the leader of the group" --> "broken by [the one] you presume is the leader"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780927


"more than capable of avoiding those cybernetic muts" --> I think the word you want is "mutts", unless this is a shortened form of "mutant," I can't tell from the context.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780969


"If the HC and General Korn... say CAU in charge" --> "say CAU [is] in charge"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588780985


"we already know the location of their lair -- at least that's what that snitch was good for" --> this sounds rather strange. Try "at least that's something that snitch was good for" or "at least that snitch was good for something"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781004


"Colonel is silent." --> "[The] Colonel is silent."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781014


"People say that CAU, or chems, how we're often called, is a unit characterized with inhumaneness and brutality." --> "chems, [as] we're often called" "a unit characterized [by] [inhumanity] and brutality."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781175


"when mess like the one with Epione happens" --> "when [a] mess like the one with Epione"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781275


"She's young and very enthusiastic about her being a part of CAU" --> the "her" is not needed
"She is obedient and I've never had to doubt that she will second-guess any order or back away from anything." --> The sentence is contradictory; try "I've never had to [worry] that she will second-guess any order"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781293


"If the intel Colonel gave me, which came from the snitch that went silent before Epione was attacked, they are hiding in some passages" --> The "If" clause is never finished! Try something like: "The Colonel gave me the intel from that snitch who went silent before Epione was attacked. If it's correct, they are hiding in some passages"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781305


"we can't just can't stroll into their territory" has two "can't"s!

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781337




Dess: "How many lifes have you taken?" --> "lives"
"Don't fight the human nature" --> "Don't fight human nature", no "the"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781198


"So, we were to supposed to take out" --> remove the "to" before "supposed"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781219


"The young boy avenged his mother without a second though" --> "without a second [thought]" missing T

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588781231




Efreitor Denzil: "don't just stand there like frozen." --> "don't just stand there like [you're] frozen."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694320

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General / Re: Low-tech build viability (no crafting / hacking / lockpicking)

« on: January 02, 2016, 05:59:24 pm »

Sure, I think you could do it. A lot of the loot you find in locked containers is crafting stuff anyway, useless to a non-crafter except as vendor trash. Since you won't be able to explore ventilation shafts and many alternate routes will be closed to you, you will have to expect a lot of extra combat, though. Even if you get really good at stealth, there will be crowded corridors and true-sight bots that you just can't get around without lockpick skills.

Not being able to disarm traps is not a huge problem as long as you can SPOT them to avoid them or set them off from a distance; I'm playing a 0-Traps character right now with high Per and it's just fine.

The psi-talker sounds like a fun character to try this with. Finally, a reason to invest in Mercantile! Traps might present more of a problem here, though, due to the low-Per nature of Psi builds.

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Bugs / Re: 1.0.0.6 Jyles refuses to sell lab room stuff

« on: January 02, 2016, 04:57:46 pm »

Thanks, Styg.

51

General / Re: core city own house security needed?

« on: January 02, 2016, 04:50:38 pm »

You need it because Loot is Life and Life is Loot.   

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General / Re: Southern Fishing Tour - Demon Squid, Ghostface, Phantom Jelly

« on: January 02, 2016, 04:46:45 pm »

The best Fallout-like game since 1999 has an extensive and powerful drug crafting system which relies on some components that can ONLY be found by fishing, just FYI.

Anyway, the Demon Squid and Phantom Jelly can be found in the various caves that open up after you return the drill part. Just explore the caves you access with TNT and keep fishing, you'll find them. The Ghostface, it seems, can only be found much later in the game, in the Deep Caverns.

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General / Re: Core City House Crafting Bonuses

« on: January 02, 2016, 09:13:55 am »

It's 15% (not 15 flat points) for each bench.

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Suggestions / Re: So, who is using enetgy weapons?

« on: January 02, 2016, 09:08:05 am »

I think this is in the wrong subforum, but to answer your question, me. The electro-pistol does damage that 1. hits multiple clustered targets, making it almost like a mini-grenade you can fire twice a turn, and 2. can stun. It can also reach sky-high crit multipliers with appropriate mods and Practical Physicist; I think mine is doing 255% crit bonus damage right now or something silly. Combine with Aimed Shot, and watch 3-4 enemies drop in one turn. Few enemies resist electric damage, and it works especially great on bots and jerks in metal armor.

I have not found as much use for laser/plasma pistols in comparison.

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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors

« on: January 02, 2016, 05:16:47 am »

Grammar and spelling errors, special Protectorate edition.



Computer in... I forget which abandoned research station it is. Panacea? Anyway: "there are couple of unencrypted emails" --> "there are [a] couple of unencrypted emails"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325604


"due to recent turmoils within the organization" --> "due to recent [turmoil]"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325632



Jyles: He says "We offer standard shelves for one hundred charons a piece" but then you must pay 300 charons for two of them. So he should say they offer them for one hundred fifty charons a piece. Jyles is bad at math!

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325834



Protectorate guard: "I must ask you to holster all visible weapons... and otherwise potentionialy dangerous equipment" --> "[potentially] dangerous equipment"
"Failure to do say" --> "Failure to do [so]"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588521849



Protectorate secretary: "It is an honor to be working for in the United Stations consulate" --> "for" or "in", not both

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522732



Consul Oliver: "The consul is looking at his portable computer as you were stepping into his office." --> "as you [step] into his office."
"He shakes your hand, smiles with an almost identical white smile as you've seen on Ambassador Athanas" --> "He shakes your hand, smiles [a white smile almost identical to the one you saw] on Ambassador Athanas"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588521870


"you know what's the situation there" --> "you know [what the situation is] there" sounds more natural

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588521929


"Ambassador informed me" --> "[The] Ambassador informed me"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588521982


"Ambassador told me" --> "[The] Ambassador told me"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522039


"He's been in charge since the Fort Apogee's deployment." --> "He's been in charge since [the Fort's] deployment" or "...since [Fort Apogee's] deployment"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522055


"this is the first time it had happened" --> "the first time it [has] happened"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522429


"You're an outsider, dear Corporal, or have been before the sergeant's squad renegaded" --> "or [you were when] the sergeant's squad [went renegade]"


http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522633




Colonel Cathcart: "Yes? Said the man behind the table with a heavy, booming voice" --> "Yes? [Says] the man behind the table"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522088


"I wanted to help the South Underrail" --> "I wanted to help South Underrail" (no "the")

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522134


He says "a junior officer always salutes his superior first" even when the player character is female.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522164


"It just happens to be that I have a mission for you." --> "It just [so] happens [] that I have..."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522229


"the bad public opinion about the Protectorate" --> "the bad public opinion [of] the Protectorate"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522258


"Consul, unfortunately, often fails to realize..." --> "[The] Consul" or "Consul [Oliver]"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522280


"turn south and the first intersection" --> "[at] the first intersection"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522304



Case: "but then it often sound like" --> "but then it often [sounds] like"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522780



Anastasia: "deforming my throat with every inhale." --> "with every [inhalation]" or "with every [breath]"
"The damage to my focal folds" --> "[vocal] folds"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522823


"Consul is a competent..." --> "[The] Consul is a..."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588522910



Luka: "...which makes it difficult to hear someone approaching. And yours has been..." --> "...difficult to hear [someone's approach.] And yours has been..."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523017


"I'm sorry, I was focused on repairing the right leg stabilizers that I wasn't even aware..." --> "I was [so] focused"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523043


"I wasn't asked that question in a long time." --> "I [haven't been] asked..."
"I was living there when the riots and death were at its peak." --> "at [their] peak"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523104


"Let's give it a shot, I though!" --> "I [thought]!" missing T

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523283


"Colonel is different." --> "[The] Colonel is different."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523320



Captain Blackwall: "These occurrences repeated several times already" --> "These occurrences [have] repeated"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523393



Faceless Mask oddity text: "The inner workings of mask have been destroyed" --> "The inner working of [the] mask"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523415



Dirty Tom: "But as the things currently stand..." --> "But as things currently stand", no "the"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588523444

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Bugs / even more minor errors

« on: January 02, 2016, 02:37:41 am »

This poor dead turret has no name.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=586528889

And neither does this poor... dumpster or whatever it is, under the Port Zenith warehouse.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820078


When using a Super Steel sheet in a tactical vest, the description of the finished armor incorrectly states that the armor has a fabric ballistic panel.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=586853814


Just more junk piles that "forget" they have been looted:

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=586853876

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588694515


And last but certainly not least, this curtain in the Black Crawlers' hideout cannot be shut once it is opened. HOW WILL THE ZONE RATS POOP IN PRIVACY??

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820168

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Bugs / Re: 1.0.0.6 Jyles refuses to sell lab room stuff

« on: January 02, 2016, 01:58:00 am »

Here you go: https://www.dropbox.com/sh/yqhnbaffwscrrd2/AAALy1xTsNtDUbWUUrRZJ1UPa?dl=0

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General / Re: Suggestions on pure (or nearly pure) psi build

« on: January 01, 2016, 04:16:59 pm »

It's probably doable, but I would be frustrated by the lower psi regeneration and the incredibly low HP, I think. Until you're able to craft a really strong shield for yourself, that -25% HP on 4 con is probably going to mean a lot of reloads. Dodge and Evasion can be quite good eventually, but they cannot protect you from everything, including other psi users.

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General / Re: Do some merchant buy any of the following...

« on: December 31, 2015, 05:53:16 pm »

I assume same is true for the various scap types. Correct?

Correct.

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Bugs / Re: Report spelling/grammar errors

« on: December 31, 2015, 05:46:52 pm »

GRAMMAR FOR THE GRAMMAR GOD, SPELLING FOR THE SPELLING THRONE



Arena announcer: Multiple spaces between "we have our" and "beloved Chemical Agent"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819544

"Will [gladiator name] become Invictus, or will join the one hundred and fifty six gladiators slain by Dread Lord?" --> "or will [he/she] join"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819763

"welcome to what is about to be one of greatest, most anticipated matches" --> "one of [the] greatest, most anticipated matches"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819871



Carnifex: "Moving around feels a bit difficult if one's head is not attached." --> "Moving around [is] a bit difficult" or "Moving around [seems] a bit difficult"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819893

 "And don't make me regret for coming back from retirement." --> the "for" is not needed

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819879

"Do not dissapoint me" --> "disappoint" one S two P's

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819902



Lanista: "You're becoming big player now" --> "becoming [a] big player"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819567

"If that wasn*t enough" has asterisk instead of apostrophe
"and send his to to the scrapyard." --> and send [him] to the scrapyard" or "and send his [robot/sentry/whatever] to the scrapyard", with only one "to"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819642



Garry: "I'm going to make sure I be as close as I can to the bloodbath" --> "I'm going to make sure I [am] as close as I can [be] to the bloodbath", or "I'm going to make sure I [get] as close as I can to the bloodbath". Oh Garry, you're so subtle. 

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819788



Andrea: "It's growing popularity" --> "Its"
"due to the JKK making sure it's being broadcast" So, I don't know what the abbreviation "JKK" actually stands for, but no one else I have met in the game calls them "*the* JKK," so for consistency I would say drop the "the" here.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819577

"so neither the runners or the viewers don't know which room comes next." --> "so neither the runners [nor] the viewers [] know which room comes next." no "don't"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819625

I was not fast enough to get a screenshot, but on the coil spider level of the gauntlet the announcer says "arachophobia" instead of "arachnophobia". (Missing "N")



Travis: "How much are you asking for that mechanics workbench." --> This is a question, so it needs a question mark.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819934

"I got it from mechanic in Core City." --> "I got it from [a] mechanic in Core City."
missing space between "brand new." and "Short pause"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819946



West: "He stare becomes" --> "[His] stare becomes"
"There is a lot of expensive tools in that thing." --> "There [are] a lot of"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587819975

"but my back's a bit friable." No one would say "friable" about their back; try "fragile" or "temperamental" or "my back's liable to act up."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820001



Gorsky: "Tell me about Zone Rats." --> "about [the] Zone Rats." (sorry, no screenshot)

"I've spent quite a number of years in Core City before I came to SGS." --> "[I} spent quite a number of years"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820013

"weak bastads" --> "weak [bastards]"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820099

"an old service station, build right into the bloody cave." --> "[built] right into the bloody cave"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820107



Sneaky: "it probably means they are still stored altogether somewhere in the warehouse." --> "still stored [together] somewhere in the warehouse", or just "still stored somewhere in the warehouse"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820026

missing space between "and gear here." and "We'll lay low"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820154



Core City commoner: "You're ain't from around here?" --> "[You] ain't from around here?"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820065



Mykola: "Tunneler is ready to go." --> "[The] tunneler is ready to go."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820127



SGS Botanist: "A also take care of the mushrooms" --> "[I} also take care of the mushrooms"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=587820181



Jyles: "with a shielded plasma bot on it.." Double period.

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325232

"I would like you to fix ground floor lights." --> "fix [the] ground floor lights."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325297



Zilla: "The instant you mentioned his name" --> "mention" present tense
"her fissured, charred to face" --> the "to" is not needed

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325338

"Do not let me repeat myself." --> "Do not [make] me repeat myself."

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325367

Missing space between "VOLUNTARILY." and "They fight"

http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=588325430