Old Jonas
- Now that's a critter you just want to steer clear
off.
+ Now that's a critter you just want to steer clear
of.
- Scientists call them Azure-something, because of their blue stripes, but the rest of us just
calls them psi beetles or psi bugs for obvious reasons - they can sling all kinds of psionics at you.
+ Scientists call them Azure-something, because of their blue stripes, but the rest of us just
call them psi beetles or psi bugs for obvious reasons - they can sling all kinds of psionics at you.
- If you run into two of them, you better start retreating while you can. At least they are not that fast, so you should be able to.
+ If you run into two of them, you better start retreating while you can. At least they are not that fast, so you should be able to
evade them.
- From my experience it's the smaller groups or individual tunnelers that you should be most
vary of. Larger groups generally leave other Underrail folk alone as long as
they don't bother them.
+ From my experience it's the smaller groups or individual tunnelers that you should be most
weary of. Larger groups generally leave other Underrail folk alone as long as
they aren't bothered.
- Some also call them '
the Faceless' because they believe that under their huge masks they have no face. Superstitious don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.
+ Some
people also call them '
The Faceless Ones' because they believe that under their huge masks they have no face. Superstitious
folk don't like people saying that word though; they say it can draw their attention to you.
- If you absolutely must fight them, try to get close and personal. That's when they are not comfortable with exposing their massive brains so they can sling psionics and will either try to gain some distance or will just bite you; and their bite is far less dangerous than their psionics.
+ Lots of problems in this sentence.
- You see, the weird thing is, not only do they hit you harder when they are in a group, they also start throwing crazier and crazier stuff your way the more of them
joins the fight.
+ You see, the weird thing is, not only do they hit you harder when they are in a group, they also start throwing crazier and crazier stuff your way the more of them
join the fight.
There are a lot of grammar errors that I didn't point out in the above. But my grammar is not much better, so I can't suggest alternatives.