When meeting Archibald Knight, officer in the second dialogue option should be plural. "I'd say there are finer officers here than me, but thank you."
the dialogue a couple lines later could be smoother as, "It's horrible. I have all this! He gestures Look! Power, wealth, everything I want! Yet, I lost the most precious thing, and with it, everything."
Also, the Praetorian Caped Peacekeeper's description capitalizes zoner in "resident Zoner" when it shouldn't. The scapular version is uncapitalized.
