Captain Broderick: "It's not that just that I saw a guy" --> "It's not just that I saw a guy" (no double "that")
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=579495931Hadrian Tanner:
"Existence of such an organization" --> "The existence of such an organization" (needs an article to sound natural)
"While it's manifestation" --> possessive is "its" not "it's"
"know that is could have been" --> "it" not "is"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=579637925"This will, I predict, at one point... bring about interesting events" --> "at some point" is what a person would actually say when talking about the future
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=580206888"It used to served us well" --> either "It served us well" or "It used to serve us well," not both
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=580337326"But if you can't find it, I want the money coin back" --> "money" or "coin," not both
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=580337342Mordre: "It must have costed a lot." --> "It must have cost a lot" is the proper past participle
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=580206901Edgar: "...blocking and underground river" --> "an" not "and"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=581818603"One day, he came before us and told us that someone who calls himself 'Rathound King' is invading our hunting grounds. At one point, Gideon has, according to his words, managed to even speak to this man, but it turned out he ain't nothing but a filthy savage, who had no interest in discussing anything with anyone"
This is just kind of a mess of conflicting verb tenses and weird phrasing. It's hard to understand and does not sound natural. Try this instead: "One day, he came before us and told us that someone [calling] himself 'Rathound King' [was] invading our hunting grounds. At one point, Gideon [said he had even managed] to speak to this man, but it turned out [the man/guy/"King"] [wasn't] nothing but a filthy savage, who had no interest in discussing anything with anyone." ...Technically "wasn't nothing but a filthy savage" is not correct either but this preserves the slangy style of the original.
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=581818620"That marks the start of our conflict. From then on, he's been attacking..." --> "Since then, he's been attacking"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=581818632Description of Burrower Carapace: "carapace is though" --> "tough"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=581818650Captain Herve: "We tried to blitz it back before they're set up but that ended badly." --> "We tried to blitz [them] back before [they'd] set up"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582449569Dude: There is a missing space between "...it's tough." and "The immense..."
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582449583Doc: "...removing her blood-stained surgical gloves and throws them in a garbage can." ---> "and throwing them"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582449609There is a missing space between "lose him." and "Morphine"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582449626Major Clifton: "Their sole purpose is to oppose Protectorate and the unification of stations, calling it oppression and other ridiculous terms, while in fact they themselves are nothing but a violent gang that supposedly fights for freedom, yet if all who disagree with their world view are dubbed as brainwashed and, if possible, are brutally killed."
This is a run-on sentence which is difficult to understand. Try this: "Their sole purpose is to oppose Protectorate and the unification of stations, calling it oppression and other ridiculous terms. [They supposedly] fight for freedom, [but] in fact [they are] nothing but a violent gang. All who disagree with their world view are dubbed as brainwashed and, if possible, are brutally killed."
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547236Ambassador Athanas: "They cling on to us like we're the bad guys..."
"Cling on to" doesn't make sense here. Try "They pretend we're the bad guys..."
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547255Halim: "...when my wife was ordering bracelet to be made." --> "was ordering [the] bracelet to be made."
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547263Oskar: "I now about him." --> "know" not "now"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547278Derica: "The Praetorians keep us safe us." --> "The Praetorians keep us safe." Just one "us"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547292Tchortist Missionary by Hardcore Bar: There appear to be multiple spaces between "has the ability" and "to regenerate itself"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547309Harriete: "tell their wifes they love them" --> "tell their wives"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547322Jon the Beautiful: "'cause few sections of the tracks" --> 'cause [a] few sections"
"the left" --> "they left"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547335Sneaky: "they bore right out of the cliff" --> "they bored"
http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=582547348